hi
dear reader can you help me to check and correct this composition
the question is
Try and imagine your slef in solitary confinment , write a short essay in wich you describe what would miss most, what books you think you would read, what possessions you would like to have with you .etc(120-140 WORDS)
and I wrote :
"It's my first day in the solitary confinment ..I'm full of hope , I feel that I can over come everthing ..my self confidence is getting higher.
I can't bear,I can't star here anymore ..that was myposition after one week,oh my God
I need to talk,I need someone , no no I need my mom , no I need my friend..Ii really need a shoulder to cry on ,I'm getting deprssed
It's very hard to stay in solitary confinment, I tried to imagine that,
I found it imposible.
I felt lonely and I was in a very bad mode
I think that imprisonment for life is an immoral punishment and very bad thing.
so when we decide to punish somewho , we have to think twice and seriously."
so can you check it for me ..
Rgards
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Re: I need your help
First of all check your spelling. Be careful and don't disregard small mistakes.mercy wrote: and I wrote :
"It's my first day in the solitary confinment ..I'm full of hope , I feel that I can over come everthing ..my self confidence is getting higher.
I can't bear,I can't star here anymore ..that was myposition after one week,oh my God
I need to talk,I need someone , no no I need my mom , no I need my friend..Ii really need a shoulder to cry on ,I'm getting deprssed
It's very hard to stay in solitary confinment, I tried to imagine that,
I found it imposible.
I felt lonely and I was in a very bad mode
I think that imprisonment for life is an immoral punishment and very bad thing.
so when we decide to punish somewho , we have to think twice and seriously."
Re: I need your help
Proofread and revise for spelling and punctuation.mercy wrote:hi
dear reader can you help me to check and correct this composition
the question is
Try and imagine your slef in solitary confinment , write a short essay in wich you describe what would miss most, what books you think you would read, what possessions you would like to have with you .etc(120-140 WORDS)
and I wrote :
"It's my first day in the solitary confinment ..I'm full of hope , I feel that I can over come everthing ..my self confidence is getting higher.
I can't bear,I can't star here anymore ..that was myposition after one week,oh my God
I need to talk,I need someone , no no I need my mom , no I need my friend..Ii really need a shoulder to cry on ,I'm getting deprssed
It's very hard to stay in solitary confinment, I tried to imagine that,
I found it imposible.
I felt lonely and I was in a very bad mode
I think that imprisonment for life is an immoral punishment and very bad thing.
so when we decide to punish somewho , we have to think twice and seriously."
so can you check it for me ..
Rgards