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The star

When the star falls down
Please grow it by tears
Then it will let you be more stronger

When the star is not shining anymore
Please kiss the star
Then it will shining for you again

When the star passes by the sky
Please pray a hope for you
Then the star will achieve your hope

there's a mistake in the 6th line " will shining" ....you've to say: will be shining OR will shine.
in these lines you use many tenses, i.e: you use: present simple, present continuous and future any way...i hope you use grammar correctly.
i think you have good idea in this poem.
congratulations.

Thanks to let me know these mistakes, I'll correct them on the next time.

never mind...u r welcome