Correctness of a phrase in lyrics for a song

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Correctness of a phrase in lyrics for a song

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Hello everyone,

Here a question about the correctness of a phrase which is meant for the lyrics in a song. Not being a native English speaker, I'm in a doubt which of these phrases is perfectly correct/incorrect in English?

1. "Do you dream in colors or you dream in black and white?"

2. "Do you dream in colors or dream in black and white?'

(Meaning: "your dreams in your sleep are they in colors or in black and white?")

Or if that's ambiguous, then wouldn't it be better to put it:

3. "Do you dream in colors or it is in black and white?"

Thanks for your feedback and best vibes !
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Re: Correctness of a phrase in lyrics for a song

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i think you'd better say:
are your dreams colored or uncolored....
are your dreams with colors or without colors
of course, this is in case you don't care for the rhyme, because the rhyme will change.
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Thanks for your suggestion. Never the less, this not only breaks the rhyming but also the meaning and also the rhythmic meter. It's a poetry, not just a talk. And I need the phrase "black and white" which is kind of emblematic. I anyway have been advised to use: "Do you dream in colors or dream in black and white?"
Still, thank you really for your reply.
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BadDisciple wrote:I need the phrase "black and white" which is kind of emblematic.
OK ...i think this phrase is important to show emblematic...i think i got the purpose...
any way: you'er welcome my friend.
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